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Ace return my man.
"To to, or not to too, that has always been my question."
I often get that one wrong. About long sentences though, you reveal yourself in their usage to be more the lawyer than the journalist. This of course is fine but...
I was enjoying the sentence but it was getting harder to track the longer it went on. The crack that might help is to write sentences as if actors had to repeat them. Then you get a better idea where both the pauses for breath as well as reflection might better go. You'll know as well, if not better than I do, that the general rule is the shorter the sentence the stronger the point made.
But what the heck! I couldn't write as much as you and it be so readable without spending twice as much time editing it down. Perhaps time to have a look at the layout though? Reading your column is like reading a printed bog roll or a Sanskrit pray wheel. Fucking odd!
